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My Star Trek 13 Pitch

CaptainWacky

CaptainWacky

I want to smell dark matter
Assuming they want to go on with remaking stuff


NOT the full pitch, stuff to be added...


WAR on the planet ORGANIA between two human looking factions.

Alien entity appears and tell them to change their ways. Says they have A MILLION YEARS and if the war doesn't end they'll be wiped out. Organians are stunned.

A MILLION YEARS LATER

WAR between Starfleet and Klingons. Huge fucking space battle. Kirk finally orders the Fleet to retreat as they will be wiped out battling for one system. Warlike factions in Starfleet angry at Kirk. Klingons take Organia.

Kirk wants to attempt peace talks after Old Spock encourages him but Starfleet orders him to go undercover on Organia with Spock, Bones and Uhura and try to turn the Organians against the Klingons as it's a key system.

Kirk tries to talk the Organians into rebelling they say no he's kind of disgusted. KLINGON COMANDER KOR eventually finds Kirk they have a big fight. But then the Organians make all the weapons disappear! They're non-corpeal. They warn that this is the worst possible time for a war.,,

The alien entity returns. He praises the Organians, but says it matters not as other humanoids have appeared and are savage childlike races that need to be wiped out. Kor tries to stab him but the alien injures him. Kirk angrily asks what right the alien has to judge them. Kor is impressed by Kirk's bravery. Kirk asks the alien for its name...

It says its name is Q.

TO BE CONTINUED/IMPROVED
 
Kirk and Spock chase Klingon invasion squads over the Enterprise's hull on WARP BIKES (basically a little warp nacelle with handlebars and a seat), before crashing through the front window of the bridge, killing all the extras inside, who are sucked into dramatically soundless space.
 
Carol Marcus is wearing a special weaponised costume when the organians make all the weapons disappear, and she suddenly appears naked, which is essential to the plot.
 
WAR seemingly on Earth between modern day looking humans. But a caption reveals we are on the planet ORGANIA.

Alien entity appears and the fight stops. Alien tells them to change their ways. Says they have A MILLION YEARS and if their warlike ways don't end they'll be wiped out. Organians are stunned.

A MILLION YEARS LATER

The Enterprise is on their five year mission but Kirk is frustrated. Starfleet won't let them travel too far from Earth due to continued clashes with the Klingons. Kirk is about to make first contact with a non-humanoid species of space whales when Admiral Tobenamed contacts him with the news that the Klingons have invaded the Organian system, going against a treaty, and the Enterprise is needed to lead the Fleet into battle.

Kirk tries to talk the KLINGON COMMANDER KOR out of further aggressive action, but Kor (rightly) points out that the Organians. Huge space battle in the Organian System follows. Ships are crippled and destroyed. Klingon ships decloak and they outnumber the Starfleet vessels. Kirk finally orders the Fleet to retreat as they will be wiped out battling for one system. Klingons take Organia.

Warlike factions in Starfleet angry at Kirk. Want him to make it "right".

Kirk wants to attempt peace talks but Starfleet orders him to go undercover on Organia with Spock, Bones and Uhura and try to turn the Organians against the Klingons as it's a key system. OR IS THERE SOME OTHER SECRET REASON?

Kirk tries to talk the Organians into rebelling they say no because they're pacifists. Krik is kind of disgusted. Kor eventually finds Kirk they have a big fist fight after Kor says he wants to see what Kirk is made of. It's about to esculate to a phaser fight when the Organians make all the weapons disappear! They're non-corpeal and were only appearing as humans for a specific reason. They warn that this is the worst possible time for a war.,,

The alien entity returns. He praises the Organians, but says it matters not as other humanoids have appeared and are savage childlike races that need to be wiped out. Kor tries to stab him but the alien just laughs and throws him back, injuring him. Kirk angrily asks what right the alien has to judge them. Kor is impressed by Kirk's bravery. Kirk asks the alien for its name...

It says its name is Q.

Organians say they will wipe out the humanoids in the name of Q.

TO BE CONTINUED/IMPROVED
 
Due to extreme battle damage, Scotty gets stuck in a turbolift with Keenser for the latter half of the movie, with hilarious results.
 
I've no idea where they will go, but what I do know is after I left the cinema on Thursday, I hadn't felt so good as watching anything Star Trek related since the last season of DS9.
 
Pretty much concur...except I was blown away with #1..which was everything I hoped it would be, despite all the nay-sayres freaking out cuz it wasn't according to canon. Sheesh. Gimme a break.

Loved Into Darkness. Loved it, I say!
 
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